Triumvirate Part 5 Comments

[Hamma]

http://www.planetside-universe.com/articles2.php?articleId=20

:D

[Incompetent]

my feelings can best be summed up as such, :cool2:.

[Marsman]

/me make mental note never to cut in line in front of Hamma! :D

Excellent read as always Manitou!!

[Hamma]

:evil:

:sniper:

[SVoyager]

darn this is some very nice story. S!

:clap: :clap: :clap:

[SandTrout]

It didn't connect to the rest of the storyline in the least, and created a perfect character that never makes mistakes. This perfection is to the point of it being extreamly unrealistic.

Hamma just seems too L337

It lacked a transision to the present time from the flashback it entered.

I'm still waiting for something to be writen from the NC perspective.

Note:This is just my opinion, and my atempt at constructive critisism. Any Flames will be ignored.

[Hamma]

There are going to be a ton of installments until game release. Give it time ;)

[TheSHiFT]

Hamma, Kaikou, TheShift, Enigma and the three other pilot trainees were all very nervous, but still confident they would do well.
hahaha i love that part :)

�This is Mosquito 12 to tower, over,� Hamma said on the com-link.
and all that stuff too, nice touch

[TheGeneral6189]

This is a great piece of writing and I hope to see much, much more. I don't want to offend you, but I consider myself to be a very good writer. Planetside looks like it would be extremely fun to write about, and I want to be a part of it. If it would be possible to write some sort of companion to the pilot stories I'd be extremely happy. Maybe a story about the MAX support teams, or Guerilla Snipers of the Terran Republic, or even the story of a frontline grunt. I think just about anything from this game would be an exciting story. Just please think about it before you turn me down, please.

[Zarparchior]

Excellent work, as always. :D

But if you wanted creative criticism, then what SandTrout said. ;)

[Manitou]

I really do listen to the criticism guys! It gives me a perspective I don't have; the ability to see it objectively!

Trust me, I listen to every piece of info and you will see me apply the ideas as I go! This is a work in progress, and I an having a blast doing it!!

Thanks all, for the nice comments and help!! :love:

[Tobias]

i would write a planet side story, but it would not be half as cool as yours, it would just be the Vanu killing TR and TR.....no plot.

[KoldFusion]

Nice work Manitou. I have finally caught up on them all. Keep up the good work :)

[IggyWattson]

Great job, looking forward to some more stories from ya!

[Incompetent]

ok, from now on, lets not bump three month old threads, ok IggyWattson?

[IggyWattson]

Well, I just read the story recently so I told him my opinion. Doesn't bother me how old it was, what does it matter to you?(retorical question, not in need of a reply)

[Lexington_Steele]

There is always PMs. :)

[Hamma]

eh, bumping a thread like this is not a problem, as it is linked from the article. Go easy on the guy :p

[Tobias]

Hamma, stop bumping threads