Training's Over

[SEZHUR]

EDIT: CRAAAP! It seems that the google docs link was private only and I've probably lost half my audience. That error has been fixed (hopefully). I would be deeply grateful for any feedback. Thanks.

I liked my formatting the way I wrote it, so here's a google docs link. Honestly, while critiques on the story are all good and well, I'm far more interested on what you have to say about the writing itself. The story was lifted straight from actual events (and modified a little at the end).

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1...it?usp=sharing

Thank you for taking the time to read this, hopefully you enjoyed it.

[OCNSethy]

I like your style. I enjoyed this very much!

[Sonny]

Hi Sezhur,
Ah somehow I missed this one the first time round! I agree with OCNSethy, it is very well written, I think all the description is great and it flows very well. Look forward to seeing more .

Sonny