Tell me what you think?

[Triggar]

I didn't mean to own you. I know how completely important it is for people to step up and deflate the ego for the sake of improving one's final output

Seriously, it isn't a personal attack. I would probably like you as a person if I knew more about you. I'm just trying to help you improve as a writer, you gotta be different! Give people a reason to keep reading.